In need of constructive criticism 4 outline.If you UR a history major or know how 2 write well, please help me

Your thesis is VERY broad. Put more specifics in there, like how, when, why he influenced these changes, and what the changes were. From your outline, I can tell you have a lot of information. What you need now is to focus that information into the thesis you are arguing. This is what makes a good essay.